My grandmothers house is cold, it is not cozy or warm and it is not the place I remember from my childhood. It is not bright and it is certainly not hopeful.
My grandmothers house is not home baked cookies, warm dinners or big comfy chairs; it used to be.
It used to be soft blankets, hot soup, bags of candy, comfort tea; Stay home sick days, holidays,any days; But this is no more.
Great start! the lists are perfect. Try varying words so that they have different number of syllables, this could change the flow in a way you might like
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