I keep thinking about my project three....

My project three is not perfect and I am well aware it never will be. However, I think a rhetorical move that would enhance this work would be separating myself from the peice. I want to give the reader the scene and the place, but not so much of me. I want my reader to make decisions on their own by giving them more imagery and more description of my place, instead of description of my feelings. I will also change the format of my project. Right now it is a poem when it should be an essay.